The graph shows the demand for energy and the energy available for fossil fuels in Freedonia from 1985 to 2005. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph shows the demand for energy and the energy available for fossil fuels in Freedonia from 1985 to 2005. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The line graph depicts the
demand
data in terms of the required
energy
and the available
energy
extracted from fossil fuels in Freedonia between 1985 and 2005,
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the
energy
demand
ratio was low for a long period of time
while
the rate of
energy
availability was higher in the same period, Glancing at the chart reveals that, in 1985 the
demand
for
energy
rate was nearly close to 400
billion
megajoules
,
however
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it plummeted in 1995 right after reaching the peak with bearly 700
billion
megajoules
, after 5 years of significant drop, the
demand
ratio showed a steady pattern close to 3
billion
megajoules
,
whereas
the
energy
demand
was going down between 1985 and 1990,
however
, after a steady period of 5 years roughly about 2
billion
megajoules
, the availability had shown a gradual increase starting from 2000 to reach its climax in 2005 with exactly 700
billion
megajoules
,
to conclude
, the stock
energy
was highly lower than the
energy
accessibility between 1986 and a few years before 2000.
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