Many families moved to different countries. Some people think children get benefits from this while others consider it is hard for children if families move to a foreign country, discuss both views and your opinion.

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there are several parents
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prefer immigrate to other countries
becuase
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because
it seems to them, there are highly beneficial for
children
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their children
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.
in contrast
, some parents have a negative attitude towards
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this
subject and they believe
this
decision has hard for their
children
. in
this
essay, I will
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discuss both sides of these views and say my opinion. on the one hand, there are those who subscribe to
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view that immigration has several benefits especially, for their
children
. they insist that
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this
way is a decisive factor for
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in several ways and they are able to learn several things through
new
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experience
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experiences
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,
for example
learning
new
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language,
becoming
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and becoming
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familiar
to
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a wide variety of cultures
in
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worldwide.
furthermore
, in some developed countries there is high-quality educational infrastructure so, they will be able to use the latest educational amenities.
such
as in
USA
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the USA
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the students use
a professional facilities
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professional facilities
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in
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the laboratory
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laboratory
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on the other hand
, many commentators justifiably argue that there are some drawbacks for
children
when their parents decided to travel
in
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other countries. From
this
point of view,in some cases the
children
are unable to Compatibility with the environment, so it
happen
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some
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problems
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for them.
for example
, they suffer from new lingual and unfamiliar behaviour or new roles.
however
, I don't find
this
argument valid because most of the early age group are willing to relate with new friends. in conclusion,
although
there are minor negative points in
this
way, I strongly agree its positive aspects are noticeable.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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