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The crime rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries. Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions.

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currently, the crime rate among teenagers has increased
due to
 many factors so,
that
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leads
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lead
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 to creating some
troubles
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trouble
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 in the country ,especially in
social
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the social
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 community so, I am going to show the essential factors and give a good suggest solution. At the
first,
the problems between
parents
 and the relationship lead to divorce,
for instance
,
for
instance
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 there might be a problem between mam and dad and the teenagers grow up around some troubles
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, therefore,
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therefore
 the youth will be weak
personality
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personalities
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 and scared.
secondly
, Acquiring bad traits from
parents
 leads to an effect on many
individual's
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individuals'
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 moral or values
for example
 when a father drink alcohol or drug that made the teenagers have bad characteristic
Moreover
, children are left by their
parents
,
therefore
 finding their actions terrible
due to
 The lack of education. I think that the great suggest solution makes some
the
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Awareness programs for raising children and
also
, Awareness programs in schools to learn children how they can deal with their
parents
. In conclusion, the crime rate will be increased if there is no
helping
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 from
parents
However
, I believe that a good country comes from a good youth duo to young are a secret for any developing country.
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