The graph below shows the average consumption of cheese per person in england, scotland, wales and northern ireland between 1980 and 2020

The graph below shows the average consumption of cheese per person in england, scotland, wales and northern ireland between 1980 and 2020
The Line graph gives information about the medium amount
consumption
of
cheese
per kilogram for every person living in
England
,
Scotland
,
Wales
and Northern
Ireland
in the five
years
1980, 1990, 2000, 2010 and 2020.
overall
, the average
cheese
consumption
start at 20kg in 1980 in Northern
Ireland
while
in
Wales
a begin at 45
KG
and almost 80
kg
in
Scotland
But the hight Average for
cheese
consumption
was in
England
,
in addition
, in Northern
Ireland
and
Wales
go up in the
years
2020,
while
the two other countries
Scotland
and
England
Average decreased. In the initial of the year 1980
England
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it was the highest amount of
consumption
but it goes down from 1990 until 2020 to end by Almost 90
kg
,
,
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otherwise
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Wales
and
Scotland
show some amount
increase
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between 1980 and 1990 to the end by
Scotland
downward dramatically from 3
years
By 55
kg
of
cheese
consumption
, certainly,
wales
the average
cheese
consumption
increased widely in 20
years
while
from 2010 to 2020 the
consumption
of
cheese
steady ,
Furthermore
, to ending by Northern
Ireland
, goes up fairly in 2000
also
in the next 10
years
increased dramatically,
moreover
, from 2010 to 2020 remained constant by an average of 55KG of chees
consumption
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