The graph below shows the average consumption of cheese per person in england, scotland, wales and northern ireland between 1980 and 2020
The Line graph gives information about the medium amount
consumption
of cheese
per kilogram for every person living in England
, Scotland
, Wales
and Northern Ireland
in the five years
1980, 1990, 2000, 2010 and 2020.
overall
, the average cheese
consumption
start at 20kg in 1980 in Northern Ireland
while
in Wales
a begin at 45 KG
and almost 80 kg
in Scotland
But the hight Average for cheese
consumption
was in England
,in addition
, in Northern Ireland
and Wales
go up in the years
2020, while
the two other countries Scotland
and England
Average decreased.
In the initial of the year 1980 England
it was the highest amount of Add a comma
,England
consumption
but it goes down from 1990 until 2020 to end by Almost 90 kg
, ,
Change the punctuation
apply
otherwise
Add a comma
,otherwise
Wales
and Scotland
show some amount increase
between 1980 and 1990 to the end by Change preposition
of increase
Scotland
downward dramatically from 3 years
By 55 kg
of cheese
consumption
, certainly, wales
the average cheese
consumption
increased widely in 20 years
while
from 2010 to 2020 the consumption
of cheese
steady , Furthermore
, to ending by Northern Ireland
, goes up fairly in 2000 also
in the next 10 years
increased dramatically, moreover
, from 2010 to 2020 remained constant by an average of 55KG of chees consumption
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