The graph below shows the average consumption of cheese per person in england, scotland, wales and northern ireland between 1980 and 2020

The graph below shows the average consumption of cheese per person in england, scotland, wales and northern ireland between 1980 and 2020
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The Line graph gives information about the medium amount
consumption
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of
cheese
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per kilogram for every person living in
England
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,
Scotland
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,
Wales
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and Northern
Ireland
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in the five
years
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1980, 1990, 2000, 2010 and 2020.
overall
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, the average
cheese
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consumption
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start at 20kg in 1980 in Northern
Ireland
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while
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in
Wales
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a begin at 45
KG
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and almost 80
kg
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in
Scotland
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But the hight Average for
cheese
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consumption
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was in
England
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,
in addition
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, in Northern
Ireland
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and
Wales
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go up in the
years
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2020,
while
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the two other countries
Scotland
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and
England
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Average decreased. In the initial of the year 1980
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England
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it was the highest amount of
consumption
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but it goes down from 1990 until 2020 to end by Almost 90
kg
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,
,
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apply
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otherwise
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,otherwise
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Wales
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and
Scotland
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show some amount
increase
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between 1980 and 1990 to the end by
Scotland
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downward dramatically from 3
years
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By 55
kg
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of
cheese
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consumption
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, certainly,
wales
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the average
cheese
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consumption
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increased widely in 20
years
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while
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from 2010 to 2020 the
consumption
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of
cheese
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steady ,
Furthermore
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, to ending by Northern
Ireland
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, goes up fairly in 2000
also
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in the next 10
years
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increased dramatically,
moreover
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, from 2010 to 2020 remained constant by an average of 55KG of chees
consumption
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, cheese, england, scotland, wales, ireland, years, kg with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go up" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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