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The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the average maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees
celsius
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Celsius
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 per day,
while
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 the chart explains the average
number
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 of
days
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 with rainfalls each month in two Australian cities. At first glance, it can clearly be seen that the maximum range in
Brisbane
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 was higher than in
Canberra
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 and the rainfall occurs more during
february
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February
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 and
march
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March
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 in
Brisbane
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. First of all, the maximum average in
Brisbane
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 started at almost 30 in
january
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.
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it started to increase, but it fell to stand at 22. After that, it kept increasing until reaching the top which is approximately 30
at the end
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 of
december
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.
On the other hand
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, the maximum average in
Canberra
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 began at higher than 25. Unfortunately, it started to decline until reaching 12 in
july
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July
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. Following that, it jumped significantly until landing at 27 in
december
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December
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.
According to
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 the minimum average of
Brisbane
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, it was sharply higher than the minimum average in
Canberra
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. By far, the
number
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 of
days
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 with rainfall in
Brisbane
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 was higher than in
Canberra
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 with 6
days
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 in
january
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January
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. In
march
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March
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, the
number
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 of
days
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 in
Brisbane
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 remained constant.
However
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, in
Canberra
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, they grew slightly reaching 8
days
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. Interestingly, the
number
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 of
days
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 in
Canberra
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 during
june
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June
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,
july
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July
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 and
august
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August
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were
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 the same which
are
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is
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 10
days
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. Surprisingly, in
Brisbane
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, the
number
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 of
days
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 remained stable from
june
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June
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 to
september
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September
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 81%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, days, brisbane, canberra with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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