The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.
The table compares and contrasts
spending
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the spending
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of five different nations on various products , which are measured in percentage , during the year 2002.
Overall
, most countries spend their money mainly on alcohol and food.
Whereas
, the least expense
were
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on education and leisure.
To begin
with , Turkey and Ireland were the nations that spend the most money on drinks and tobacco , and it accounted for 32.14% and 28.91%
While
the other three countries' cost for these items was 18.80% ,16.36% and 15.77% respectively. Leisure and
letracy
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literacy
in these countries reported the lowest figure , and Spain was the nation that consumed the least spending and it was only 1.98% in that year. Meanwhile, Italy and Sweden made up almost identical value in education and leisure , and it was 3.20% and 3.22% respectively.
While
Turkey and Ireland had 4.35% and 2.21%.
Clothing
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The clothing
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and footwear sectors held the second most spending in 2002, and it was 9.00% for Italy.
Whereas
, Turkey , Spain and Ireland recorded 6.63%, 6.51% and 6.43% spending in that industry .
However
, Sweden
comparised
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compared
comprised
the lowest consumption , which was 5.40%.
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  • expenditure
  • consumer goods
  • chart
  • countries
  • overall
  • compare
  • analyze
  • categories
  • consumer spending
  • trends
  • proportions
  • statistics
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • notable
  • remarkable
  • substantial
  • considerable
  • determine
  • conclude
  • in conclusion
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