The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.
The table compares and contrasts
spending
of five different nations on various products , which are measured in percentage , during the year 2002.
Correct article usage
the spending
Overall
, most countries spend their money mainly on alcohol and food. Whereas
, the least expense were
on education and leisure.
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was
To begin
with , Turkey and Ireland were the nations that spend the most money on drinks and tobacco , and it accounted for 32.14% and 28.91%
While
the other three countries' cost for these items was 18.80% ,16.36% and 15.77% respectively.
Leisure and letracy
in these countries reported the lowest figure , and Spain was the nation that consumed the least spending and it was only 1.98% in that year. Meanwhile, Italy and Sweden made up almost identical value in education and leisure , and it was 3.20% and 3.22% respectively. Correct your spelling
literacy
While
Turkey and Ireland had 4.35% and 2.21%.
Clothing
and footwear sectors held the second most spending in 2002, and it was 9.00% for Italy. Correct article usage
The clothing
Whereas
, Turkey , Spain and Ireland recorded 6.63%, 6.51% and 6.43% spending in that industry . However
, Sweden comparised
the lowest consumption , which was 5.40%.Correct your spelling
compared
comprised
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