Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have helath problems as a result. Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

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lifestyle may be one of the main causes of cardiovascular
disiases
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diseases
disease
. Since
people
do not have enough
time
or money for
fitness
they tend to have less activity in their lives
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required by doctors. In
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setting up
fitness
classes at
work
or providing financial incentives may result in
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solution
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this
issue. There are
two
main reasons for insufficient exercise at
work
. First of all, employees are busy so they do not have free
time
to go to the
fitness
club before or after their job.
According to
statistics,
people
in Serbia
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average spend from eight to ten hours at
work
,
two
hours for commuting and the rest of
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time
at home.
Secondly
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for
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membership in
fitness
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club may be
expernsive
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expensive
for ordinary
people
.
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,
price
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of
membership
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in
gym
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the gym
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in Belgrad may be about USD 1,000 for a year.
However
, worldwide experience has
two
common solutions for these problems. One of them may be a creation by a company of
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to have
a
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fitness
at the office. It may help to have physical activity directly at
work
if
people
struggle to find free
time
to
work-out
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.
For example
,
two
years ago international IT companies (
such
as Amazon or Google) set up Yoga classes at the office and
recieved
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received
positive feedback from their workers. Another point to consider is providing financial incentives to employees who would like to exercise on a regular basis. Since
price
in
fitness
clubs may be expensive, it will motivate
people
to go there.
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, if
company
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compensate
price
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of
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a gym
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membership and it may create an individual’s ability to exercise.
While
vast
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majority of
people
due to
different circumstances do not have enough
sport
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activity, many health issues may arise. Active actions by employees need to be done in order to solve
this
problem.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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Example:

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  • Finally
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  • In general

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