The maps show the park which was built in 1920 and current construction of the park.

The maps show the park which was built in 1920 and current construction of the park.
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The given structures demonstrate Grange
Park
in different timelines.
One
of the plans illustrates a current map,
whereas
another
one
was used in 1920.
Overall
, today's
park
contains an underground entrance and a playground for children unlike the version of the
park
when it first opened. In general, three gardens of rose were located opposite
to
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each other in 1920 , but nowadays
one
of the gardens is replaced to
centre
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of the
park
. Now all of the special places for seating are situated in the centre around the garden
in contrast
to before when four seats
was
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located
in
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the East side. These days, the Amphitheatre for concerts is built
instead
of a musician stage in Grange
Park
. The First opened
park
had only two possible points to enter. Nowadays there is
third
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entrance with a parking area and it is located under the ground. The first plan of the
park
had a fountain in the centre,
while
today's map contains water features
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southwest
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of the public
park
.
One
of the most important changes was in
northwest
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part of the
park
, the pond for water plants was replaced by the playground.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, one with synonyms.
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