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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast-food shops between 2003 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast-food shops between 2003 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The frequency of consuming from fast
food
 cafes is demonstrated by the given bar
chart
 in the
USA
.
Chart
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 contains three time
line
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lines
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 of
informations
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information
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, exactly 2003 , 2006 and 2013 .
Overall
, it is clear
by
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 the
chart
 that categories
such
 as “Once a week ” and “Once or twice a month” outnumbered others . In general , there is the smallest
percent
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per cent
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 of
people
 in the
USA
 who prefer to go every day to
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a restaurant
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restaurant
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restaurants
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specialized
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specialising
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to
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in
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 fast
foods
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food
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, more precisely they did not exceed
border
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a border
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 of 5
percent
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per cent
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. 20
percent
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per cent
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 of
people
 enjoy fast
food
 restaurants more
once
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than once
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 a week in
the
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apply
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2006, it is
considerable
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a considerable
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 trend in comparison to
previous
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the previous
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 sort of
people
, whereby other timeline’s human was
little
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a little
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 bit more than
15percent
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15 percent
.
USA
people
 during
the
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2013
was
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were
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 less competitive among the consumers of fast
food
centers
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centres
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 than
2006
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in 2006
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 and 2003 , in more detail 2006’s frequency reach a peak
of
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in
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chart
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the chart
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 .
Bar
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chart
 shows that most of
USA
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the USA
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 residents in 2013
visit
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visited
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 fast
food
 restaurants once or twice a month , and these
result
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inresult
fromresult
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 significantly outnumbered
indicators
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the indicators
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 of 2006 ,
whereas
 in
this
 case achievement of 30
percent
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per cent
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 was reached by
people
 in
the
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apply
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2003. There was
equal
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the equal
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percent
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percentage
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 of enjoyed human in
category
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the category
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 of “a few times a year” and
also
identical
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an identical
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 amount of
people
 who never visited fast
food
center
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centers
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 in the 2006 and 2003 .
Submitted by 29th of april on

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, chart, usa, percent, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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