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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast-food shops between 2003 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast-food shops between 2003 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The frequency of consuming from fast
food
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 cafes is demonstrated by the given bar
chart
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 in the
USA
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.
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Chart
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 contains three time
line
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lines
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 of
informations
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, exactly 2003 , 2006 and 2013 .
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, it is clear
by
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from
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 the
chart
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 that categories
such
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 as “Once a week ” and “Once or twice a month” outnumbered others . In general , there is the smallest
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percent
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per cent
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 of
people
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 in the
USA
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 who prefer to go every day to
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a restaurant
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restaurant
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restaurants
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specialized
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to
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in
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 fast
foods
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food
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, more precisely they did not exceed
border
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 of 5
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percent
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per cent
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. 20
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percent
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per cent
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 of
people
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 enjoy fast
food
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 restaurants more
once
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than once
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 a week in
the
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apply
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2006, it is
considerable
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a considerable
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 trend in comparison to
previous
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the previous
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 sort of
people
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, whereby other timeline’s human was
little
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a little
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 bit more than
15percent
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15 percent
.
USA
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people
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 during
the
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apply
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2013
was
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were
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 less competitive among the consumers of fast
food
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centers
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centres
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 than
2006
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in 2006
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 and 2003 , in more detail 2006’s frequency reach a peak
of
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in
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chart
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the chart
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 .
Bar
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chart
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 shows that most of
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USA
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the USA
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 residents in 2013
visit
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visited
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 fast
food
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 restaurants once or twice a month , and these
result
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inresult
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 significantly outnumbered
indicators
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the indicators
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 of 2006 ,
whereas
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 in
this
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 case achievement of 30
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percent
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per cent
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 was reached by
people
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 in
the
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apply
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2003. There was
equal
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the equal
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percent
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 of enjoyed human in
category
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the category
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 of “a few times a year” and
also
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identical
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an identical
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 amount of
people
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 who never visited fast
food
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center
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centers
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 in the 2006 and 2003 .

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, chart, usa, percent, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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