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The chart bellow shows the different level of post-school qualifications in Australia and proportion of men and women who held them in 1999

The chart bellow shows the different level of post-school qualifications in Australia and proportion of men and women who held them in 1999
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The bar chart represents the different levels of post-school
qualifications
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 in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. The vertical axe shows five different
qualifications
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: Skilled vocational
diploma
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, Undergraduate
diploma
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, Postgraduate
diploma
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, Bachelor’s and Master’s degree, and the horizontal -- indicates the percentages.
According to
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 the chart, we can easily compare gender distribution in
qualifications
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. In 1999, there was a significantly large number nearly 90% of men, who got skilled vocational diplomas,
while
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 in
this
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 field only 10% of females participated.
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, males were dominated in achieving Postgraduate diplomas and Master’s degrees, where they had still a huge advantage of approximately 70% compared to women’s 60%.
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, 70% of females had the opportunity to obtain an Undergraduate
diploma
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,
whereas
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 merely 35% of males had the same
qualifications
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.
In addition
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, women were
also
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 leaders in Bachelor’s degrees by 55% but slightly low 45% of men tried to demonstrate their ability in
this
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 area.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words qualifications, diploma with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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