The chart bellow shows the different level of post-school qualifications in Australia and proportion of men and women who held them in 1999

The chart bellow shows the different  level of post-school qualifications in Australia and proportion of men and women who held them in 1999
The bar chart represents the different levels of post-school
qualifications
in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. The vertical axe shows five different
qualifications
: Skilled vocational
diploma
, Undergraduate
diploma
, Postgraduate
diploma
, Bachelor’s and Master’s degree, and the horizontal -- indicates the percentages.
According to
the chart, we can easily compare gender distribution in
qualifications
. In 1999, there was a significantly large number nearly 90% of men, who got skilled vocational diplomas,
while
in
this
field only 10% of females participated.
Also
, males were dominated in achieving Postgraduate diplomas and Master’s degrees, where they had still a huge advantage of approximately 70% compared to women’s 60%.
However
, 70% of females had the opportunity to obtain an Undergraduate
diploma
,
whereas
merely 35% of males had the same
qualifications
.
In addition
, women were
also
leaders in Bachelor’s degrees by 55% but slightly low 45% of men tried to demonstrate their ability in
this
area.
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