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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The bar chart illustrates the number of
export
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 values in five different categories in one nation between 2015 and 2016.
In addition
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, the table represents how the proportions of each category changed in the time period.
Overall
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, petroleum
products
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, engineered goods, and textiles experienced a degree of
growth
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 regardless of their total
export
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 earnings,
whereas
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 agriculture
products
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 showed only slight
growth
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.
Furthermore
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, gems and jewellery
export
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 decreased in value throughout the years. Petroleum commodities recorded bigger sales than any other category in 2015, at just over $60
billion
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, showing a
growth
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 of 3% in the next year. Engineered
products
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also
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 had a high
export
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 value, standing at approximately 57
billion
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 in 2015. The figure experienced a considerable rise to roughly 62
billion
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 in 2016.
Although
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 the number of earnings in textile
export
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 was much smaller than the other two categories above, it experienced the biggest
growth
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 during the years, starting with 26
billion
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 in 2015 and ending with just over 31 million, which represented an increase of more than 15%. In comparison, agricultural
products
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 experienced a smaller
growth
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 in the time period, standing at just over 30
billion
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.
Then
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 the figure stayed almost the same in 2016.
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, the
export
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 of gems and jewellery exhibited a small decline in amount. In 2015, the
export
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 value was around 42
billion
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,
whereas
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 it fell to just over 30
billion
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 in 2016.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, products, growth, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • categories
  • value
  • percentage change
  • compare
  • trends
  • changes
  • chart
  • table
  • overview
  • introduce
  • highlight
  • describe
  • summarize
  • information
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