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Numbers of tourist visiting a Caribbean island (2010-2017)

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The line graph illustrates how many economic
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tourists were visiting a certain Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017. Units are measured in figures
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, it can be clearly seen
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number of visitors rose through the period. In terms of guests, the highest number of visitor stood on the island started at 0.75 and increasing ease steadily and reached 1.5 in 2014 and remains constant until 2015.and
then
 it dropped slightly and again reached 1.5
at the end
 of the final year
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, visitors staying on a cruise ship started at 0.25 at the beginning and
then
 visitors witnesses a slight incline and reached 0.5 exactly in 2011 before dropping the figure for tourists in 2012
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 rose dramatically and reached a peak of 2 in the
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final year. The total number of foreign started at 1 million and increased dramatically and reached apply 3.5
at the end
 of the year
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