The bar chart shows the number of volunteers in New Zealand who helped in sports organizations in 2010. The pie chart illustrates the number of volunteers doing different types of jobs for that same period. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart shows the number of volunteers in New Zealand who helped in sports organizations in 2010. The pie chart illustrates the number of volunteers doing different types of jobs for that same period. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates the number of people, who did volunteer work in sports organizations in 2010. The pie diagram depicts the types of jobs which had been done voluntarily for the same time period. As can be seen from the bar graph, the vast majority of people

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with dependent children, in fact, it constituted 49,8%. At the same time, the largest share of sport support roles in NSW was a coach instructor or teacher, which accounted for 206000.

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, the household type

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as couples with no dependent children made up 26,6%, which is 2 times less than the previous category,

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, the number of people who selected a committee member or administrator and scorer or timekeeper as the volunteer work was equal to 158 and 128 thousand, respectively.

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accounted for from roughly 10% to 12%,

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, referee or umpire and medical support or other made up from 60000 to 100000. In conclusion, the largest proportion of volunteers is from couples with dependent children and the most popular job is committee member or administrator.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

192 words

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