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If a product is good and meets customer needs, then people will buy it and advertising is unnecessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Advertising is unnecessary because
people
 will buy a product that meets their needs and is reasonably priced. 
To begin
 with, there are three reasons that can be used to explain why I strongly agree.
Firstly
,
people
 will choose
products
 to buy based on their quality because these days technology is more advanced than before.
For example
, digital device technology Digital devices like smartphones can search the information
of
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products
 so that when
consumers
 want to buy what they want, they can use a lot of information to decide if a product is good and necessary enough for them or not.
In addition
, users have more education, so they will be more conscious,
whereas
 in the past marketing could not make them buy it because now
consumers
 are buying
products
 based on quality, not advertising.
Secondly
, if
products
 can address the pain point that
consumers
 want even though they do not have advertising, they will still buy the
products
.
For instance
, when
people
 have health problems, they will deliberate on researching
the
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product information on the internet so as to solve them.
Thirdly
,
people
 now manage money in their daily lives so as to buy the
products
 that are necessary for them.
In contrast
, if
products
 are unnecessary, even if the advertising is good,
people
 will still not buy them. In conclusion,
due to
 three reasons,
consumers
 buy with quality and buy
products
 that they want to use and that
are
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 necessary;
on the other hand
, they do not buy
products
 just because of advertising.
Hence
, I strongly agree with it.
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