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Band 5.5

If a product is good and meets customer needs, then people will buy it and advertising is unnecessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Advertising is unnecessary because
people
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 will buy a product that meets their needs and is reasonably priced. 
To begin
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 with, there are three reasons that can be used to explain why I strongly agree.
Firstly
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,
people
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 will choose
products
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 to buy based on their quality because these days technology is more advanced than before.
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, digital device technology Digital devices like smartphones can search the information
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products
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 so that when
consumers
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 want to buy what they want, they can use a lot of information to decide if a product is good and necessary enough for them or not.
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, users have more education, so they will be more conscious,
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 in the past marketing could not make them buy it because now
consumers
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 are buying
products
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 based on quality, not advertising.
Secondly
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, if
products
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 can address the pain point that
consumers
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 want even though they do not have advertising, they will still buy the
products
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.
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, when
people
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 have health problems, they will deliberate on researching
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product information on the internet so as to solve them.
Thirdly
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,
people
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 now manage money in their daily lives so as to buy the
products
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 that are necessary for them.
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, if
products
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 are unnecessary, even if the advertising is good,
people
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 will still not buy them. In conclusion,
due to
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 three reasons,
consumers
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 buy with quality and buy
products
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 that they want to use and that
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 necessary;
on the other hand
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, they do not buy
products
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 just because of advertising.
Hence
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, I strongly agree with it.
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