The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.
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The diagrams illustrate the construction of the Secondary
School
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which was situated at West
Park
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in 1950.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the changes
of
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Secondary
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School
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Schools
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. The process consists of three stages
such
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as developing the car
park
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, sports field and science block whether removing the
houses
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and farmland In terms of
first
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the first
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stage, there was a
school
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and playground on the right side,
while
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houses
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and farmland were on the left side in 1950.
Besides
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,
main
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road was on the top side of the
houses
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and
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School
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Schools
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.
Second
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stage is that
houses
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were converted
to
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into
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the car
park
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and science
block
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blocks
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as well as
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the farmland
turned
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was turned
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into a sports field
during
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in
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1980.
Moreover
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, the
school
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developed
to
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into
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a
school
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main building.
Third
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The third
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and final stage, in 2010 car
park
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was expanded and was decreased the size of
sports
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the sports
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field.
On the other hand
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,
main
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the main
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road,
school
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main building, science block and playground remained unchanged.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words school, park, houses with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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