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Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information maybe relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#employers #people #jobs #information #hobbies #interests
Recently, getting a job
are
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 more and more difficult because there are many works nowadays and it interview
requirement
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 need to be thorough. About requires,
while
 some
people
clamed
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claim
 the applicants need
share
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to share
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 some private
information
to
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 interviewers
such
 as their favourite activities, married status or what excites
you
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, etc. But
beside
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 that, some
people
 didn’t support
this
 opinion because they claim that
this
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 questions will make some
people
 uncomfortable when you ask them. I strongly believe that the employers had some questions about personal
information
 are important for some reason:
Firstly
, when the employers understand your hobbies or some
information
of
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 you, it is really easy
to
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 the company or business
support
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 you in work. Every work
are
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 always need assistance,
althrough
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although
this
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 jobs are easy or difficult. Understanding and helping are the most things that create
successful
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.
On the other hand
, getting the personal documents of the
people
 applying can help them know their staff weaknesses or strong point to arrange for suitable position work. A suitable position is really vital, it shows you know where you are and what should you improve. In
conclution
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conclusion
,
understand
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about
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their staff is the most
things
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 any business or company need. To support
this things
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this thing
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, you should
open
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 and confident to show some
your
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of your
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 personal
information
. But, you
also
 need to know how to keep some
information
 private and not reveal it all.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job application
  • personal information
  • hobbies and interests
  • marital status
  • relevant
  • useful
  • privacy
  • assessing candidates
  • qualifications
  • experience
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