The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selection and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.

Summarise the information by selection and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The first diagram illustrates the process of
salmon
life, and the second diagram shows the size of
salmon
over
three
different periods.
Overall
,
it is clear that
there are
three
stages in the
salmon
life, beginning with a
salmon
egg and ending with
a
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laying the egg.
Salmon
live in
three
different places when they are in
three
different sizes.
At the first stage
in
salmon
life, the fry that size 3 to 8 cm live in the lower river which has fast flowing approx 4 years.
Then
the smolt when
salmon
grow to 12 to 15 cm goes to open sea living. Approx 5 years later,
salmon
will be adult, and the size becomes 70 to 76 cm. Adult
salmon
go back to their birthplace upper river which is so slow-moving that helps adult
salmon
safely lay eggs under reeds and next to small stones.
Salmon
eggs will become
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