The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selection and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The first diagram illustrates the process of
salmon
life, and the second diagram shows the size of salmon
over three
different periods.
Overall
, it is clear that
there are three
stages in the salmon
life, beginning with a salmon
egg and ending with a
laying the egg. Correct article usage
apply
Salmon
live in three
different places when they are in three
different sizes.
At the first stage
in salmon
life, the fry that size 3 to 8 cm live in the lower river which has fast flowing approx 4 years. Then
the smolt when salmon
grow to 12 to 15 cm goes to open sea living. Approx 5 years later, salmon
will be adult, and the size becomes 70 to 76 cm. Adult salmon
go back to their birthplace upper river which is so slow-moving that helps adult salmon
safely lay eggs under reeds and next to small stones. Salmon
eggs will becomeSubmitted by cleoovo on
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