Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar; which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?
As we all know, plenty of
sugar
can be found in all kinds of manufactured foods
and beverages today. The ensuing potential health problems should not be trivialised. There is an argument that if we raise the price of sugary products
, people will naturally buy less of them. I completely disagree with this
view and believe that the focus of the solution to this
problem should be on other areas.
If sugary products
cost more, it will not stop those who are truly addicted to these foods
and drinks from consuming them. The companies that produce these products
can even make more profit. Besides
, this
measure may have more of a counter-productive effect, as the price goes up, people may save the money that should be spent on healthy foods
such
as vegetables and fruits to buy snacks.
Therefore
, in my opinion, alternative methods should be considered to tackle this
problem. On the side of manufacturers, they should control the use of sugar
across the board and especially the amount of added sugar
should be cut down. On the side of governments, instead
of regulating the prices of products
, a more necessary action would be to encourage people to have a healthier diet, getting sugar
from natural foods
rather than finely processed ones. In addition
, subsidising health-conscious companies is a good way to combat this
problem. When there are fewer products
high in sugar
in our markets, the possible health risks will automatically be avoided.
In conclusion, in order to address the high consumption of sugary products
and the host of related health problems that follow, I believe that simply raising prices is not going to work. Businesses and governments should take responsibility for addressing these issues at the root.Submitted by xiexue1223 on
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