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The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
#bar #scores #teams #b #c #four #seasons #information #features #comparisons
The bar gives information that how many scores did 3 teams of A,B and C
get
Wrong verb form
got
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 over four
seasons
.
Fistly
Correct your spelling
Firstly
, as
a
Correct article usage
apply
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team
 A, they got the highest point about 35
points
 in
2004
Correct article usage
the 2004
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season
.
On the other hand
, they got 5
points
 in 2002. It was the lowest score of them.
Secondly
,
as
Change preposition
apply
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a
Correct article usage
apply
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team
 B, they were good
at
Change preposition
in
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 all
seasons
. They won all
seasons
. In 2002, their score was 82
points
, it was the highest score from all of
seasons
Correct article usage
the seasons
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 and teams. But, in 2004, they got 43
points
,
it
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 was the lowest point
which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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they got.
Lastly
, in terms of
team
Correct your spelling
Team
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 C, they did
a
Change the word
their
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 best in
2003
Correct article usage
the 2003
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season
, in that
season
, they acquired 15
points
. It was the highest point
which
Correct word choice
that
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 they got through all
seasons
.
However
, they got 5
points
 in 2005 and they
were lose
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were lost
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 in that
season
.
Overall
,
Team
 B was the great and the
winner
Replace the word
winning
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team
through
Change preposition
throughout
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 all
season
Fix the agreement mistake
seasons
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 from 2002 to 2005.
Until
Change preposition
In
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in
Change preposition
apply
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2003,
team
 A was the second
winner
Replace the word
winning
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team
 but after that,
team
 C did so.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words seasons, team, points, season with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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