With deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered as they lose their habitat and some are even threatened to the point of extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What measures can be taken to deal with this problem?

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activities

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as urban development and illegal hunting. Those activities result in the losing

animals

foods

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and

house

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, some kinds of

species

become extinct. In

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animals

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safety of them. First of all,

animals

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which controls the amount of each

species

in their ecosystem. It is

also

helpful to manage the number of natural plants without

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, if their environment

are threaten

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by human, the natural systems can not operate

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given function.

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species

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rapidly increase or decrease

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in naturally

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other fields

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large amount of financial

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, in kinds of extinction, we can not revive dead

animals

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animals

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animals

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environment.

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restriction is essential for controlling immoral

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and companies which destruct

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habitat

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and illegal hunting. If the government set high

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nature.

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, the government should make green areas where

animals

can construct

thier

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their

habitats without any threat. In conclusion,

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guaranteeing

the safety of

animals

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important

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the natural systems

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and maintaining the number of each

species

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animals

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illegal activities and

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green areas.

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With deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered as they lose their habitat and some are even threatened to the point of extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What measures can be taken to deal with this problem?

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Laminsome feels that individuals should try assimilate compeletly to the country where they live while others feel it is more important to preserve their native culture. Discuss both sides and give you opinion.

In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In some countries, people encourage their children to get a job or to travel after their secondary education and before their university education. What are the advantages or disadvantages of doing so?

The table with the percentage of students in six different departments in 2011.

Some people think robots can improve human life in future, while others think robots may affect society in a bad way. Discuss both view points and give your opinion.