With deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered as they lose their habitat and some are even threatened to the point of extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What measures can be taken to deal with this problem?

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animals

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and

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which controls the amount of each

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by human, the natural systems can not operate

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given function.

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other fields

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restriction is essential for controlling immoral

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and maintaining the number of each

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