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The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports center now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pictures above are the ground plans of a university
sports
 centre before and after future renovation. The main difference is the enlargement of its area by adding a couple of facilities
while
 removing two outdoor courts on each side of the old
sports
 centre. Here are the summaries of the new facilities.
First,
the Gym’s area will get increased, but still in the north part of the building.
Then
, it is similar to the changing room. There are
also
 two more of them at the corner of each side of the south building.
Further
 west of changing room connects to the leisure pool,
whereas
 the second one, connects with the
sports
 hall and two dance studios.
Lastly
, a Cafe and
Sports
 shops can be found directly after entering the building, opposite each other and before the Reception. In conclusion, the new
sports
 centre will have bigger areas and support more visitors and various activities.
Such
 as leisure swimming, performance at
sports
 halls, and dancing.
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