With deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered as they lose their habitat and some are even threatened to the point of extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What measures can be taken to deal with this problem?

Many
animals
have suffered from
human's
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selfish actions,
such
as cutting down trees, urbanization and poaching, which leads to more and more endangered species and extinction. In my opinion,
although
these revolutions have given
a huge benefits
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on
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our lives, human beings have
responsibility
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a responsibility
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for protecting
animals
to a large extent. I believe that
the
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intervention from governments and zoos can help
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this
issue.
To begin
with, there was
more
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equal balance between humans and
animals
in olden times.
Animals
in forests used to be hunted for
certain
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amount of daily food, but now some
animals
have been killed for clothing,
such
as fur products.
However
,
beatiful
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beautiful
seanery
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scenery
deanery
and rare species attract
turists
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tourists
which can bring about significant income for
economy
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.
Therefore
, the importance
for
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animals
should be gotten more awareness and
protections
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protection
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are considered seriously. To deal with
isse
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issue
issues
,
firstly
, governments should implement stricter rules against
poarching
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poaching
and organize guards to protect
animals
. Some products,
which
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endangered
spices
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species
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are utilized, should be forbidden as well.
Moreover
,
while
deforestation
have
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proceeded constantly, more
tree-planting
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should be arranged.
Additionally
, zoos can offer professionally-run breeding and rehabilitation programmes.
This
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advantages should be taken advantage of in order to prevent
from
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extinction. In
concolusion
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conclusion
, more and more endangered species and extinction have been reported in modern days
due to
the fact that human beings have deprived animal habitats and food availability, it is time for humanity to take action to preserve
animals
with some changed government policies and zoos.
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