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The bar chart shows coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cuties. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cuties. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates how frequently
people
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 take hot drinks
such
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 as Tea and
Coffee
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 in five cities
of
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in
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 Australia.
Firstly
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,
it is clear that
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 most men and women prefer to drink and spend some time in
coffee
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 shops
instead
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 of taking it away. Most
people
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 went to take a
coffee
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 or tea and bought an instant
coffee
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 in the
last
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 month. Among the five cities, in four of them the rates of
people
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 who went to a cafe for a drink is higher than others, as we can see Melbourn is at the top with above 60 per cent but in ,Adelaide it was seen that
people
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 prefer to buy instant
coffee
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 more than have cold drinks inside the
coffee
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 shops, about 55
percent
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per cent
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 of
people
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 in Hobart took instant
coffee
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 in
last
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 4 weeks
that is
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 the highest percentage among other 4 cities.
Overall
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 we can see that there are lots of
people
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 who want to spend some
times
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time
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 in cofe
instead
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 of taking fresh drinks.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "instead, last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, coffee with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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