The bar chart shows coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cuties. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cuties.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates how frequently
people
take hot drinks
such
as Tea and
Coffee
in five cities
of
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in
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Australia.
Firstly
,
it is clear that
most men and women prefer to drink and spend some time in
coffee
shops
instead
of taking it away. Most
people
went to take a
coffee
or tea and bought an instant
coffee
in the
last
month. Among the five cities, in four of them the rates of
people
who went to a cafe for a drink is higher than others, as we can see Melbourn is at the top with above 60 per cent but in ,Adelaide it was seen that
people
prefer to buy instant
coffee
more than have cold drinks inside the
coffee
shops, about 55
percent
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per cent
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of
people
in Hobart took instant
coffee
in
last
4 weeks
that is
the highest percentage among other 4 cities.
Overall
we can see that there are lots of
people
who want to spend some
times
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time
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in cofe
instead
of taking fresh drinks.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "instead, last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, coffee with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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