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The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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A given
the
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apply
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map demonstrates a science part in 2008 and the present day . In general ,it is apparent that the park has become more developed for visitors with additional scientific space for Research and development ,
receiption
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reception
, station and innovation
centre
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 .
The cyber
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Cyber
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 security and trees are not
changes
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change
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 over a period . In 2008 , there was an IT
centre
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 on the left side above a main road . There is a grove of trees on the left side of the IT
centre
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 . Now , the name of
this
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 place has changed to
innovation
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an innovation
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centre
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 . There are
also
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 two additional buildings
constructing
Wrong verb form
constructed
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 from the top and left of the diagram , sectioning off an area with grassland , Research and development and
University
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a University
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 hub .
However
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 , in the top right corner of the picture , there are
also
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 two supplementary things cycle path and
bus
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a bus
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 stop .
Moreover
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 , at the bottom of the
map
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,map
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 a station was built in the middle of the railway today .

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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