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Traffic congestion is a growing problem in many of the world’s major cities. Explain some possible reasons for this problem, and suggest some solutions.

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Traffic
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 jams have become the number one concern of
people
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 living in the world's largest
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.
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, most individuals are looking for answers to understand why heavy
traffic
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 is increasing so quickly in recent years. In my opinion, the number of
people
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 who come to big
cities
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 and the lack of structure can be the main causes of
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. To commence,
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 the largest
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 providing better opportunities
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 as jobs, colleges, universities, and high salaries, and so many
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 plan to immigrate from small to big
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.
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, the structure's plan collapsed and some problems
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 as
traffic
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 have come up.
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, the Infrastructure Agency in Brazil detected around 20% of
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 from the northeast move to Sao Paulo each year. Obviously, there is a big problem with it, where are
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 living? How are
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 commuting around? There is enough public transport for everyone? Are they purchasing a car?
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 my opinion, the government needs to consider putting
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 situation in its next structural plan.
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, when
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 immigrate in search of opportunities in big
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 they usually make money there and send it to their born
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, for families actually.
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, the Government of Canada has a more structured immigration program worldwide,
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, they take care of all details of each candidate's process. In fact,
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 less the possibility of
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 moving to Canada only to make money there and later sending it to their families abroad.
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, Canada has prepared to receive a couple of
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 yearly, and
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 are planned to be comfortable for new residents.
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 my viewpoint, the problem is not immigration, but the lack of planning. In conclusion, the commute of
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 will keep happening between
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 and countries, so problems like
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 jams will always be a problem if government or authorities don't anticipate it. The only way to fix it is to work on improvements or provide other options for movement,
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 as public transport.
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