The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The process diagram shows how
sugar
is made from sugar
cane
. There are seven stages, with only two variables. The process begins with sugar
cane
and ends with plain sugar
.
To begin
with, the sugar
-making process requires sugar
cane
, which is grown for a period of twelve to eighteen months. This
is then
harvested, which can be done in one of two ways. Either it is mechanically collected by means of a tractor or it is gathered by hand.
Following its collection, the sugar
cane
is fed through a crushing machine in order to extract the juice. This
is then
purified by being fed through a limestone filter,
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then
being heated in an evaporator. Here, the juice turns into a
syrup. Correct article usage
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Next,
it is fed into a centrifuge, where sugar
crystals are separated from the syrup. In the final stage, the sugar
is cooled and dried in some kind of vat.Submitted by mdelvega90 on
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