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Some people think that intelligent student should teach separately whereas others think that everyone should teach together. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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 it is sometimes thought that bright
students
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 ought to teach individually, other
people
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 believe that it is better if all
students
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 should teach one another. In my opinion, I consider that
children
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 learn more if they were taught together. On the one hand, some
people
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 think that
children
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 who are intelligent often teach separately.
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 with, those
children
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 are very
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 in nature.
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, those
people
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 are tried to learn alone compare to extrovert
students
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.
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,
children
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 who are toppers in
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school often learn in personal tuition at their home because they believed that they got
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score
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 from
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 arrangement. Another obvious reason is that those
people
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 do not want to share their ideas
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 other
students
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.
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, they have
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 trust
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any other
children
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's ideas and logic.
On the other hand
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, it is often believed that it is better if
children
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 ought to teach in a group and I agree.
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,
children
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 can get different ideas from other
children
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 if they teach in a group.
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, they can find their mistake by observing other
students
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' mistakes.
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, if
children
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 attend English class in groups of ten and more
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 all
children
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 can learn how to speak in front of more
people
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 correctly.
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,
this
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 development helps
people
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 to perform better in the university and even
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 the job too.
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, if
students
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 learn how to talk in a group
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 it will beneficial to them
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 they are attending the job meeting. In conclusion,
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people
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 may vary in their opinions, I think that
children
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 stand a better chance to succeed both in school and later in life if they are taught together.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic performance
  • individual needs
  • tailor-made
  • enriching experience
  • diversity
  • collaborative learning
  • equality
  • inclusive education
  • differentiated instruction
  • personalized approach
  • homogeneous groups
  • intellectual stimulation
  • interpersonal skills
  • critical thinking
  • peer interaction
  • self-confidence
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