Some people think that secondary schools should spend less time teaching traditional subjects like history and spend more time on teaching subjects like communication skills and business. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

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It is widely believed secondary schools should spend less
time
teaching traditional
subjects
like
history
and spend more
time
on
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teaching
subjects
like communication
skills
and business. Personally, I can neither completely agree nor disagree with
this
statement for a variety of reasons. I partly agree that secondary school should
more
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spend less
time
on
teach
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subjects
like communication
skills
and business than more teach
traditinal
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traditional
subjets
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subjects
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like
history
. One of the main reasons can be that children will
development
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more
skills
when going out in society.
This
means that they have some experience
about
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their job in the future. Another reason can be that there were many surveys of students
this
age expressing
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.
On the other hand
, I disagree with the viewpoint that secondary schools spend less
time
teach
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traditional
subjects
.
Firstly
, they will forget the traditions of the nation .
This
is because today's teenagers are following technology but gradually forgetting the national origin of the country, which will make them lose their gratitude for the merits of the heroes of the past who stood up for the independence of the nation.
Secondly
, if children don’t learn traditional
subjects
like
history
, they will lose their national pride. In conclusion,
although
children like learning
subjects
communication
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skills
and business, I’m convinced that secondary schools shouldn’t spend less
time
teaching traditional
subjects
like
history
.
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