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the prportion of elderly people is increasing in many countries.  Do you think this will be a positive or a negative change?

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It is often said that the percentage of elderly
people
 has been increasing in many countries. In my opinion,
this
 change offers tremendous negative aspects despite some advantages because there is a higher possibility of not promoting the economic growth
that is
 necessary for nations. Increasing the percentage of the elderly
people
’s population entails disadvantages to the economy.
This
 is attributed to the decreased budget that younger
people
 can use in their daily lives because they have to spend their money for paying more welfare services for elderly
people
. Generally, it may make youth
people
 hesitate to spend a lot of money to keep their financial health well. If
this
 trend penetrates into society,
it is clear that
 lower economic growth will be seen.
In addition
, the possibility of national bankruptcy can be increased.
On the other hand
, there is a benefit to enhancing the
life
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 of elderly
people
such
 as after resigning a work.
This
 is because governments have a tendency to struggle to apply some public services for the elderly.
For instance
, in Japan,
according to
 the article, 70% of politicians more care about the opinions of elderly
people
 because they have the largest percentage of the citizens, which leads to a win in political competition.
Thus
, the quality of life of the elderly will be advanced by politicians. In summary,
although
 there is an advantage in raising the proportion of elderly
people
, I believe that the negative aspect can be superior in terms of stimulating economic growth.
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