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Your English speaking friend who live in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn Explain how your friend could learn this sport Suggest that you both learn this sport together.

#english #friend #town #advice #sport
Dear sarangi, I hope you and your family are doing well. I want to share with you that we should utilise summer vacation in productive
manners
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 by learning new activities. In our city ,
majority
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the majority
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 of sports school has announced
summer
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a summer
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 swimming camp,which will be held in
swimming
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the swimming
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 pool of the
perticular
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particular
 school.
Moreover
,they give assurity that one can learn perfect swimming
with in
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within
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 a month. In my opinion, swimming is not only a
life saving
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 skill
,
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apply
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but
also
 good aerobic exercise.
Therefore
, a person can burn
bunch
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 of calories by doing 1
our
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hour
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vigorous
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 swimming. We will start swimming together on May
1'st
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1st
,as we will be free from our projects on
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the 28'th
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28'th
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28th
 of April. I hope to
hearing
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 from u regarding your
intrest
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interest
 in swimming soon. Yours sincerely Zarna Dobariya
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