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In some country owning a home rather than renting one is very important fo people. Why this might be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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In many countries, the idea of being economically independent goes hand in hand/glove with owning a house. Coming to your abode after a long day’s work gives you a sense of fulfilment. What cost does it come at? In
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 old heritage is still applicable and what downturn it might have on our lives. Owning land has always represented an important social status. It was associated with wealth and
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. It allowed you to organise
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 in order to make you a prominent element of the social class.
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, it guaranteed banks and other people a possible return in case of a bad investment or in difficult times.
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 the years. In fact, for many people investing in housing has still a huge meaning, and many of the previous factors still have the same importance.
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, investing a great amount of money in buying a house, rather than spending a little monthly rent might be quite risky. Nowadays,
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 the rate of interest in mortgages has become higher than in the
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, it became quite hard to obtain a mortgage from a bank if you do not already own some property that will outweigh
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