Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? “Overall, the widespread use of the internet has a mostly positive effect on life in today’s world.” Use reasons and details to support your opinion.

In contemporary
time
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, it is considered that using
Internet
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the Internet
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on daily basis has advantageous effects on
community
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.
This
essay totally agrees with that statement and
reasons
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the reasons
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will be explained.
To begin
with,
Internet
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has
became
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extremely
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significant part of today's world because of its effective and time-saving opportunities. As an illustration, it is impossible to imagine departments namely, banks, health care
centers
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,
universities
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and universities
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working without computer data. It includes millions of priceless
information
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,
hence
,
make
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it available
get
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any reports, certificates,
financial
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and financial
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data by typing individual codes and
name
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while
people from past decades
used
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to carrying packs of paper,
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and wait
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wait
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necessary
document
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for weeks.
Thus
, in
this
computer era where everything is sophisticated Internet was the most beneficial invention.
Secondly
, in
this
decade more and more young people who get
education
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an education
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online,
enroll
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to
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courses and learn languages with native-speaker teachers from
another countries
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.
For instance
, these days most
of
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universities
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have special online programmes with four-year education with all opportunities
as in
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on-campus.
While
,
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offline studying students go to college and focus only on education, students
on
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online may use that time for other courses and spend their time productively.
Therefore
, it is available to purchase electronic books and save
it
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them
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on
phone
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a phone
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,
laptop
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or laptop
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and read them in every
conditions
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.
To sum up
,
worldwide
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connection has altered our lives and it is undoubtedly
well-known
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the well-known
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fact that only benefits
on
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society.
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  • widespread
  • fosters
  • connectivity
  • geographical
  • facilitating
  • revolutionized
  • e-commerce
  • telecommuting
  • digital divide
  • privacy concerns
  • misinformation
  • dependency
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