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Some believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are good at or that they find the most interest. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#believe #teenagers #school #subjects #focus #interest
It is claimed that focusing on all school
subjects
 is more
advantegeous
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advantageous
,
while
 others consider concentrating on one subject that they are good at is
right
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the right
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 choice for pupils. I totally support
to focus
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 on all
subjects
 and
this
 essay will explain
reasons
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the reasons
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 and both sides. To embark with, it is predicted that
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concentrating
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 on all
subjects
 that
taught
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are taught
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 in
school
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the school
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 curriculum will expand
wisdom
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the wisdom
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 of teenagers and assist choose future
profession
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professions
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 or
desire
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desires
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 based on knowledge about all required
theme
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themes
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.
Moreover
, teenagers are often non-permanent in their age and it is normal to change a
field
 that they
are
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want to learn about,
hence
, it will be not hard and risky replace the
field
 in the
last
 years of school.
Furthermore
, knowledge is priceless and awareness about every
field
 will make people smart.
On the other hand
,
to focus
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 on one subject that interests pupil will save their energy and valuable time from wasting
it
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on unnecessary studies.
For instance
, Ilon Mask was good at Lego, math,
physics
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and physics
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 and paid attention only
for
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to
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 these
subjects
while
 he did not
interesting
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interested
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 in humanitarian. Despite
this
 fact, he succeed in
area
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an area
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 that fascinated him and known as the
most rich
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 man in the world.
Thus
, it is an astonishing example that motivates pupil who focuses on one engaging subject.
To sum up
,
although
, paying attention
on
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field
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the field
a field
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 that they adore is
reasonable
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a reasonable
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 choice for teenagers, I believe and find it more beneficial to learn hard all must-study themes because of its effectiveness.
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