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Some people say that public libraries should be free; otherwise they are just a waste of money, especially because modern technologies and the internet allow easy access to resources. Discuss and give your point of view. Opinion, for and against essay

In
this
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 era of modern technology,
people
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 are equipped with a plethora of online reading material.
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this
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, they are of the view that
libraries
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 should be free of cost and
money
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the money
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 spent to borrow books from a
library
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 is a waste. I,
on the other hand
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, disagree with
this
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 idea and consider it a threat to the survival of
libraries
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.
People
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 who are in favour of making
libraries
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 free of cost correctly point out that almost all books are available as e-books on the internet. These documents are even available in numerous languages and are easily accessible to the entire world's population.
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, a book on Electrical Engineering fundamentals, which
cost
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costs
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 10 bucks a week to lend from a
library
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, is available in several languages online.
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people
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, people
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 with
such
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 a mindset demand
libraries
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 to be free of charge.
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, it is profoundly important to understand that the small amount charged by
libraries
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 for lending books is a source of revenue, which is essential to pay off the
library
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 staff and utility bills.
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, the librarians, security guards and janitors who serve in the
library
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 get their remuneration from the
fee
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fees
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 collected by the
library
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. By declaring public
libraries
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complimentary
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non-existent
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, the management would eventually run out of funds to pay for basics
and
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, and
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 ultimately, the
library
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 might shut down. To recapitulate, it is incontrovertible that the internet is a remarkable source of information, but
this
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 does not mean that
libraries
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 should be made free for the public. The fee collected from the
people
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 is essential for the continuity of
library
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 operations.
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Thus
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 the practice should not stop.

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task response
State your view clearly in the intro and restate it in the end. Make a short, strong claim.
task response
Show a full view by giving a main idea for each part and back it with one good example.
coherence
Use easy link words to join ideas. Keep the flow simple and clear.
structure
The writer shows a clear position and keeps it across the essay.
content
Both sides are named, so the task is touched on.
content
Some real example is used to explain a point.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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