In some schools and universities, girls tend to choose art subjects (example literature), and boys tend to choose science subjects (example physics). Why do you think is so? Should this tendency be changed? Do you agree or disagree?

There is a long-standing debate about the
tendency
where
girls
select
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art
,
while
boys
prefer science at schools and universities. In my opinion,
this
tendency
has come from obsolete stereotypes and societal expectations and the perspective toward
this
tendency
need
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to be reconsidered.
Firstly
, children have been raised under the obsolete stereotype,
where
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that
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girls
have been encouraged to pursue
art
to become feminine,
while
boys
have gotten high expectations from their parents to gain successful future careers in
scinece
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science
fields,
such
as doctors and engineers.
This
perspective has a huge influence on the way youngsters think about their future and they try to meet societal expectations.
Moreover
, when it comes to
enrol
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in universities, some medical schools in Japan still
has
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have
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perjudice
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prejudice
prejudices
against gender, where males have more advantage than females.
This
bias toward males should be prohibited to give equal chances
for
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to
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females.
Secondly
, there is no evidence that
boys
are good at science subjects
whereas
girls
are good at
art
. In fact, some private
girls
' schools in Japan are well-known as
high
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educated graduates where
one fourth
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of
total
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students became doctors.
Moreover
, in modern days, more and more women prefer pursuing their careers rather than getting married and having children.
Therefore
, the old stereotype should be removed from societies and education systems should
be encourage
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to offer equal opportunities for both genders.
To conclude
,
although
there is a
tendency
where
girls
choose
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art
and
boys
select
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to select
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science for a long time, I believe that
this
stereotype is already out-of-date and individual
prefereance
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preference
preferences
should matter, not
genders
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gender
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender stereotypes
  • societal expectations
  • feminine
  • masculine
  • parental influences
  • educational influences
  • traditional gender roles
  • biological differences
  • gender diversity
  • exposure
  • encouragement
  • gender equality
  • workforce
  • genuine interests
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