The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in

Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The chart illustrates the
amount
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number
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of males and females studying
further
education whether full or
part-timetime
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part-time time
part-time-time
in three different periods in Britain.
Overall
,
it is clear that
women full-time education increased dramatically
while
men's trend experienced fewer changes.
According to
the data, during the years 1970 and
1971
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,1971
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there were 1000 men who were studying full time but in the next two decades, it fluctuated,
while
the
amount
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number
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of male
students
studying
part-timetime
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part-time time
part-time-time
flew gradually, as it is given from 100
students
in1970 it increased to 200
students
at the end
. As it is given amount of women who were studying full time escalated sharply.
At
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the ,
begining
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beginning
there was just 650 female studying full time, but
at
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in
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the 1980 and 1990 decades it increased by more than 1000
students
. Women studying
part-timetime
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part-time time
part-time-time
experienced
also
a growth
especially
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,especially
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in 1980.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.

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  • engaged in
  • distinct
  • categorizes
  • enrollment status
  • surpass
  • compared to
  • stability
  • increased significantly
  • equal number
  • gap
  • outnumber
  • decreased
  • part-time courses
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