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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report on the consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections till 2030.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report on the consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections till 2030.
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The line graph shows a 2008 study on US
energy
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 consumption since 1980 with predictions until 2030. Units are measured in
quadrillions
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.
Overall
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, it is evident that
petrol
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 and
oil
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 were the categories that consumed the highest
energy
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 from the past till the future.
Whereas
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 hydropower remains insignificant throughout the period. In 1980
petrol
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 and
oil
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 recorded the largest use of power in the USA with, 35 quadrillion units. Natural
gas
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 and coal are followed by 20
quadrillions
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 and around 16
quadrillions
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 respectively. Nuclear, solar/wind and hydropower were the categories which utilized the least significant amount of
energy
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, accounting for figures below 5
quadrillions
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 each.
Energy
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 utilization of
petrol
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 and
oil
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 fluctuates for some years after which it began to grow gradually. By 2030, it is foreseen that
petrol
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 and
oil
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 will continue to lead USA
energy
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 utilization with around 50 quadrillion units.
Furthermore
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, coal and natural
gas
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 expenditures of power
also
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 varied for a
while
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. It is projected that coal use of
energy
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 will increase
whereas
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 natural
gas
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energy
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 expenditure will remain static. By 2030 coal will be the second highest
energy
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 consumption with approximately 25 quadrillion and natural
gas
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 will followed. The least significant group which were Nuclear, solar/wind and hydropower recorded a constant figure for years. In the
future
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 all these 3 groups are predicted to use around 5
quadrillions
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 or less each.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, quadrillions, petrol, oil, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Renewable resources
  • Non-renewable resources
  • Fossil fuels
  • Nuclear power
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Solar energy
  • Wind energy
  • Biomass
  • Consumption patterns
  • Technological advancements
  • Energy efficiency
  • Sustainable development
  • Carbon footprint
  • Energy policy
  • Projections
  • Decade
  • Significant shifts
  • Economic factors
  • Environmental impact
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