The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the Republic of Freedonia.
The diagrams compare the male and female employment status in six different
job
sectors
in two different years – 1975 and 1995. As is seen from the given illustration, men were well ahead of women in all the job
sectors
in Freedonia in 1975. However
, the scenario changed in 1995 and Correct article usage
the women
women
employment scenario showed Change noun form
women's
a
remarkable progress.
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According to
the charts, men in Freedonia were visibly ahead of females in manufacturing, finance/banking, wholesale & retail trade, defence and non-defence sectors
. In manufacturing, more than 600 male employees
could be seen against only 300 female employees
out of a thousand employees
. Except in the communication sector
, the proportion of male employees
was far greater than that of females. Among the given job
sectors
, the public /non-defence sector
had the highest number of employees
while
the defence sector
had the least ratio of employees
.
After 20 years, women showed an outstanding advancement in these job
sectors
and they went well ahead of men in communication
, wholesale & retail trade Correct article usage
the communication
sectors
. They become almost equal in number in finance and banking jobs while
the gap between male and female employees’
number reduced in defence jobs. The only Change noun form
employees
sector
still dominated by the
male was manufacturing and the Correct article usage
apply
job
ratio in this
sector
remained almost the same as it was 20 years earlier.Submitted by Murod / Maksud on
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