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Some people think that newspapers are the best way to get news. However, others believe that other media are better sources of news. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #newspapers #news #media #sources
It is considered
by
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many that the best method to get
news
 is
newspapers
,
whereas
 others argue that other
media
such
 as
radio
 and television are
more
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better.
This
 essay will discuss topics from both sides of view with some detailed explanations.
To begin
 with, the benefit of the newspaper. There is no fake
information
 as the reason that there is
much
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staff
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stuff
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 that examine the
information
 before it gets published,
while
 other sources like the internet have no one to reference the data.
Therefore
, the reader will get valid
information
 from reading
this
.
On the other hand
,
newspapers
 are the slowest method to notice
news
 if compare with others.
For example
, on television, the reporter can present recent
information
,
while
 in
newspapers
 you must wait for the next day to read it.
Therefore
, the sources like Internet and
radio
 help people to receive
news
 in
real time
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.
In addition
,
this
has
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beneficial
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 to people,
for instance
,if people
listening
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 the
radio
while
 they are driving the car, if there are accidents in the way that they will go, they can avoid
it
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them
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. Personally, I prefer to receive
news
 from other
media
 because I do not want to wait for
information
. If I use other
media
 , I will know recent
news
 in 5 minutes,but if I read the paper, I have to wait for another day. In conclusion, other
media
such
 as
radio
 and television are faster than
newspaper
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newspapers
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 to get
news
.
On the other hand
,
newspapers
 are more believable.
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