The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The figure shows the multiple

stage

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of converting

sugar

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cane to

sugar

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.

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,

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the process has seven stages which

starts

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with growing

sugar

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canes and

ends

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with drying and cooling. In the first

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step

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the planted

sugar

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canes grow up for 12 to 18 month.

Second

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step

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is the harvesting time which can be done by hand working or

machines

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and vehicles. In the next stage, Crushing,

sugar

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canes

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cane

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converted

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to

lequid

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liquid

juice with a machine and

then

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the

syrup

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will be

purifying

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by passing the liquid

throghout

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throughout

the limestone filter in the fourth

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. In

continue

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, in

term

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of Evaporating, the mixture is heated , so the water will be evaporated and

juice

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the juice

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becomes

syrup

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and

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then

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the

syrup

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goes through the centrifuge which separates

sugar

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crystals from the

syrup

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by its

spining

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spinning

movement. Eventually, in the

last

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step

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by drying and cooling the substances,

sugar

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will come out.