The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relev

The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.

Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relev
The graph illustrates the entire process of manufacturing carbonated drinks, including purifying, desensitizing, adding
flavour
, packaging, and transportation.
Overall
, there are five stages before the final product is sent to supermarkets,
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with raw material, which will be heated and blended in substance to create
flavour
and texture before being packed into different containers and shipped to destinations. First of all, raw
water
will be sent from the storage to the
water
softener through a filter, where the chemicals are involved to complete the process of
water
cleaning. Following the second stage for heating evaporation and carbonation
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includes pumping the helf-completed products into electric heaters, later the cooling pipe will reduce the temperature of the
water
before relocating it into carbon dioxide to make carbonated
water
. In the third stage, carbonated
water
will be combined with various elements to create
flavour
, including colouring, syrup, and
flavour
. Final products will be packed into either can or bottle
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after
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through a filter
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and be sent to supermarkets.
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