Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is that the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

In the past
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our world has become more digitalised which has changed what
children
own and how they spend their
time
. Owning a smartphone has become the new normal for minors
as well as
access to digital content.
This
may have an effect on their imagination and behaviour. The increase
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smart devices over the past two decades has certainly had an impact on society. Particularly
children
spend a lot more
time
on
smartdevices
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smart devices
rather than being outside playing. Research has shown the negative impact
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too much
screentime
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on
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imagination, behaviour and even sleep through the emitted wave patterns.
For example
, it is now recommended that smart devices are switched off two hours before bedtime.
However
, easy access to digital content has
also
enabled many
children
to educate themselves at home. Even
children
who live in very remote areas are able to join different learning communities. The App
store
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offers a great variety of learning applications that are most of the
time
free of charge.
Children
learn on a fun device and are motivated to
percevere
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perceive
.
For example
, my own
children
have greatly improved their maths skills by doing maths on an app. My daughter was able to solve maths problems that are deemed two grades higher than her current grade in a matter of weeks.
This
progress astonished us as parents and we did not have to force her to learn with the app.
To conclude
,
children
’s use of smart devices has changed how they spend their
time
. I think the positive aspects of having access to a
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great
greater
diversity of learning material
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the negative of changed behaviour.
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  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
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