The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000

The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000
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The given graph illustrates the comparison between the number of people born in
China
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and the
USA
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from 1920 to 2000.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that birth rates in both countries look almost the same in the initial
years
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but as the
years
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passed on, the rate increased rapidly and the communist nation touched the highest point when compared to the
USA
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. Later on , the number of newborns amount was reduced drastically in both countries.
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, the
USA
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birth estimate was high compared to
China
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. In the initial era, the number of newborns in the
USA
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was just above 10% with respect to
China
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but after the year 1940 birth rates dropped steeply from 12% to 5%.
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, there was a sharp rise in born percentage up to 15% .
After
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this
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, it never touched that rate and it went down slowly in the next 50
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reaching nearly just above 5%
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it maintained a high throughout the
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rather than
China
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words china, usa, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • birth rate
  • demographics
  • population control policy
  • One-Child Policy
  • Baby Boom
  • fertility rate
  • census data
  • fluctuations
  • societal norms
  • economic prosperity
  • Great Leap Forward
  • family planning
  • contraception
  • workforce participation
  • aging population
  • urbanization
  • trend analysis
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