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The table below gives information about the three countries wit the highest populations. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the three countries wit the highest populations. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table chart depicts information about the top three heavily populated countries in the world,
China
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,
India
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 and the USA. It gives either nominal or percentage values in
regards
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regard
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 to the
overall
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 population, its increase, density, urbanisation and land area in
sqkm
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sqm
.
China
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’s and Indias’s
population
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populations
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 are similar with 1.415 and 1.245 billion
peple
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people
. The USA has a significantly lower number of
people
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 with only 327 million.
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, the US and
China
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 are very close in land size (
9.147and
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9.147 and
 9.388)
whereas
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India
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 only has approximately 1/3 of the size of either the US or
China
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. The
fastest growing
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 country since 2017 has been
India
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 with well over 1.11%. Given
Indias’
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India’s
Indias’
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 significantly smaller size,
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 has resulted in the highest density of
people
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 per sqkm. Most of its
people
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 seem to live in a rural setting as it has the lowest urbanisation compared to
China
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 and the US which has the highest percentage with 83%.
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, the table displayed data from the three most heavily populated countries in the world.
India
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 stands out as the most
densly
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densely
 populated country with the highest growth rate. The majority of its
people
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 still live in a rural environment.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words china, india, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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