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The charts below show that UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full time work after leaving college in 2008

The charts below show that UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full time work after leaving college in 2008
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The two bars portray the
students
 of UK
graduates
 and post-
graduates
 who did not continue full-time
work
 after graduation in 2008.
Overall
,
further
 study was the highest number among
graduates
 and post-
graduates
 (29,665 and 2,725) and voluntary
work
 was the lowest (3,500 and 345). Looking into detail, 17,735
graduates
 student chose to be part-time workers,
while
 postgraduate
students
 only 2,535.
On the other hand
, there was a numerous number of unemployment for graduate
students
 with 16,236 and 1,625 for postgraduate
students
.
However
, from the data, the number of
students
 who joined in voluntary
work
 was the lowest (
graduates
: 3,500 and voluntary
work
 only 345). All of
this
 shows how many Bachelors prefer to continue their studies than to
work
.
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