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The charts below show that UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full time work after leaving college in 2008

The charts below show that UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full time work after leaving college in 2008
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The two bars portray the
students
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 of UK
graduates
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 and post-
graduates
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 who did not continue full-time
work
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 after graduation in 2008.
Overall
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,
further
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 study was the highest number among
graduates
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 and post-
graduates
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 (29,665 and 2,725) and voluntary
work
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 was the lowest (3,500 and 345). Looking into detail, 17,735
graduates
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 student chose to be part-time workers,
while
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 postgraduate
students
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 only 2,535.
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, there was a numerous number of unemployment for graduate
students
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 with 16,236 and 1,625 for postgraduate
students
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.
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, from the data, the number of
students
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 who joined in voluntary
work
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 was the lowest (
graduates
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: 3,500 and voluntary
work
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 only 345). All of
this
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 shows how many Bachelors prefer to continue their studies than to
work
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, graduates, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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