The bar chart below shows average UK salaries, by city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows average UK salaries, by city.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The Bar chart illustrates, the average UK
salary
by city, including seven cities with
average
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an average
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of
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salaries beginning from 24,750 to 34,000,
in addition
,
the
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currency pounds sterling.
Overall
,
to begin
with, Cambridge,
England
is the highest
salary
Before London,
While
the second ad third cities were Bristol and Edinburgh,
therefore
, the numbers in brackets after the cities' name is the number of
people
in the sample,
Firstly
, London was the biggest
salary
, 33,634 pounds sterling by the number of
people
is 50951, as we see the second city s Cambridge,
England
; with 2180
people
in the sample,
moreover
, the average
salary
is 29,854.
hence
, Edinburgh, Scotland and Bristol
England
;
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constant in the average salaries
while
in
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the number of
people
in Bristol
a
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bit high than
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in edinburgh
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edinburgh
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,
furthermore
,the average
salary
in Glasgow,
scotland
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Scotland
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is 26,150,
in contrast
, the proportion
on
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salary
in Manchester,
england
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is 25,909. as I mentioned the lowest salaries were in Birmingham,
England
.
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