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This line graph illustrates the number of tourists who visited Caribbean islands between 2010 and 2018, measured in millions

This line graph illustrates the number of tourists who visited Caribbean islands between 2010 and 2018, measured in millions
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This
 line graph illustrates the
number
 of
tourists
 who visited Caribbean
islands
 between 2010 and 2018, measured in millions, with two different lines representing
tourists
 staying on cruises and those staying on the
islands
,
as well as
 a combined
number
. In terms of the total
number
 of
tourists
, there is a clear upward trend from 1
million
 in 2010 to 3.5
million
 in 2018, with significant growth observed in 2016.
Similarly
, for
tourists
 who stayed on
the
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cruise ships, there was a marginal fluctuation in the first two years, but a stable increase
up
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 to 2
million
 in 2017.
On the other hand
, the
number
 of
tourists
 staying on the
islands
 did not show a significant increase compared to the other two lines. It reached a peak of just over 1
million
 in 2011 and remained plateaued for the following 5 years, with even a slight decrease observed in 2016, accounting for 1.5
million
 people. In summary, the graph shows a consistent increase in the
number
 of
tourists
 visiting Caribbean
islands
, with a relatively stable
number
 of
tourists
 staying on the
islands
 compared to those staying on cruise ships.
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