The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps show the Norbiton industrial area in present and a redevelopment in the future, which will be more residential and less industrial. Looking from an
overall
perspective, the first map
include
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lots of Factories surrounding the roundabout and in the eastern line.
Also
, there is
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an a-road
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a-road
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a road
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in the southern way connected to the highway.
Likewise
, farmland is just right to the river. In the future, they are
planned
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planning
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to construct more roads to connect the area to each other
esily
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easily
,
such
as
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a a-street
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a-street
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a street
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in the east with houses,
play ground
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playground
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and
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a school
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school
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schools
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at the end
.
In addition
, Some housing
are
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is
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planned to be built in the north and
north west
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northwest
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. More facilities will
be construct
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such
as shops and
medical
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a medical
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centre.
Also
, they are concerting to build a line in the north to connect the farmland and some houses with the zone behind the river.
As well as
another roundabout will
built
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be built
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to the southern way from the large one.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, such".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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