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The plans below shows the layout of a university's sports center now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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The two maps show the layout of a school sports
centre
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 now, and how it will look after its renovation.
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, it is evident that there will be a total transformation of the looks of the plan for the eventual because a number of developments will take place in the school's layout. Presently the university play
centre
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 has two outdoor courts on the west and east side of the
centre
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 which is separated by a building with a lot of facilities. Forthcoming the west outdoor court will be replaced with a modern leisure
pool
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 with a changing room and a play shop on the south of the leisure
pool
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. The other outdoor court in the east zone will be replaced with a small play hall.
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, the middle of the design will witness little changes. The reception, seating around the 25m
pool
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, and the changing room next to the
pool
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 all will be maintained in the future map.
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 the gym will
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 maintain its position, it will be enlarged toward the east. Additional features like two dance studios will be included in the impending chart to the east region and a changing room and a cafe in the southeast area of the school sports
centre
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