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According to most projections, the world’s population will continue to rise, until it plateaus at 9 to 11 billion in the latter part of the 21st century. Without a doubt, population growth represents the largest problem facing humanity at present. Do you agree that this is the greatest issue faced by us today?

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Due to
 improvements in the medical field and technology,
day
 by
day
 the amount of birth get advancing compared to the death rate that causes
overpopulation
population
. Most projections believe that it increase between 9 to 11 billion
at the end
 of the 21st century and could be the biggest problem for humans. In
this
 ,
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essay I explain the reasons why I totally agree with it.
Firstly
, the
overpopulation
 of mankind damages nature which
further
 could harm other species
such
 as plants and animals
that is
 necessary for the earth. for ,example
due to
increasing
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 in
population
, the Ozone layer got damaged
due to
 large amounts of fuel and other harmful substances like Carbon dioxide. So it shows that
overpopulation
 in nature could
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 danger to other living beings too. Another reason why it is a massive problem is that the number of water sources which are
initially
 not only for humans but for all living beings
,
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 reversely decreases
day
 by
day
 by increasing the mankind
population
. We can already see the
effects
 of it which are all the
effects
 of
overpopulation
 in recent years. For ,instance ,
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 there is no water in most African and Asian countries not for drinking and not for other activities that cause the fall down of Agriculture. So the harmful
effects
 of the growth of
population
 are going to have
effects
 on all parts of human lives. To Summarize, I strongly agree with the statement that
this
 is a serious issue and should be dealt with as soon as possible or else it may cause irreversible damage to Mother nature
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